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Review by Hareem Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hey there!

A piece well written. The only thing that I noticed was, the paragraphs are centered, which diverts the pattern focus. But, that was okay. Make your pieces a bit long by adding details. Write more, Learn more.

Regards
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This story is a poignant, sharply observed exploration of courage, compassion, and the quiet battles fought within educational institutions. Through the eyes of Sharanya, the head of the Special Needs wing, the narrative exposes the gap between the rhetoric of inclusive education and the harsh realities that children with learning differences often face. What makes this piece remarkable is its blending of emotional nuance with incisive social commentary.

The opening scene—an eight-year-old boy standing wordlessly with a test score of one—immediately draws the reader into the heart of the issue. Nishad’s simple declaration, “I didn’t get a zero,” becomes the emotional hinge of the entire story. It represents both a child’s resilience and a system’s failure to understand him. The author skillfully uses this moment to unravel the layers of institutional negligence, revealing how true insight comes not from test scores but from attentive human engagement.

Sharanya’s determination to advocate for Nishad contrasts powerfully with the Director’s priorities—prestige, rankings, and public image. The hypocrisy of a school promoting itself as an inclusive institution while expelling a gifted dyslexic child is portrayed with subtle irony, especially in the scenes involving the Director’s obsession with her upcoming speech and reputation. These moments strike a balance between dark humor and genuine frustration.

The turning point comes through unexpected solidarity: the Vice-Principal from another school, who not only listens but acts. Their alliance symbolizes the real change-makers—the educators who value ethics over accolades.

The story concludes with a hopeful yet bittersweet resolution. Sharanya’s decision to leave the prestigious institution for one genuinely committed to students’ well-being underscores the central message: true education reform begins with individuals who refuse to stay silent.

Overall, this narrative is powerful, deeply humane, and beautifully told—an inspiring reminder of the impact one dedicated teacher can make.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This story is an evocative and emotionally layered snapshot of a pivotal moment between two women, set against the stark, windswept backdrop of western Kansas. From the opening scene at the “tiny speck” of a rural airport, the writing captures a vivid sense of place—one marked by isolation, open skies, and the restless wind sweeping across endless wheat fields. This setting not only frames the narrative but mirrors the inner turbulence of the characters, especially Wendy, whose thoughts oscillate between concern, nostalgia, and reluctant acceptance.

One of the story’s strengths lies in its ability to weave natural description, humor, and emotional tension into a coherent, intimate moment. The dialogue between the two women feels authentic, marked by the slight irritations and deep familiarity that define long friendships. The internal monologue—Wendy’s candid, sometimes wry observations about the passengers, the pilot, and her best friend’s choices—adds personality and charm. It gives the reader insight into her protective instincts and the history underlying the moment.

The details surrounding the puddle-jumper flight, including Wendy’s recollections of her own turbulent journey, provide grounding realism and raise the stakes of her friend’s departure. The uncertainty Wendy feels is not simply about a plane ride; it is about a life decision she fears may be rushed or fraught. The climactic question—“Do you love him?”—lands with emotional weight, marking the true heart of the story. The friend’s firm but slightly defensive reply captures the complexities of moving forward after past wounds.

The ending is especially effective. As the plane leaves the runway and tears streak Wendy’s face, the reader feels the blend of hope and apprehension that accompanies major life transitions. The closing reflection about mothers “not getting married for the second time, every day” adds poignancy and depth, hinting that this journey represents far more than a wedding—it marks a shift in identity, responsibility, and the bonds between women.

Overall, the piece succeeds as a tender and textured character vignette, balancing humor, atmosphere, and emotional truth.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
This poem is a vivid and unsettling meditation on nature’s slow but unstoppable reclamation of the human world, rendered through striking imagery and deeply atmospheric language. From the opening lines—“The rain keeps falling, / 'til all is mud and water”—the piece immediately immerses the reader in a landscape undergoing transformation. The repetition of water, mud, and the rising marsh creates a sense of inevitability, as if the environment has reached a tipping point and now moves with ancient purpose.
One of the poem’s strongest qualities is its ability to blend the intimate and the monumental. The fall of a “mighty oak,” a tree that has stood for “three centuries,” becomes a symbolic moment: the collapse of history, endurance, and human memory, all swallowed by the “doomsday mirror of the waters.” This phrase alone captures both beauty and dread, reflecting how the natural world can be both reflective and destructive, serene and apocalyptic.
Equally powerful is the transition toward the poem’s conclusion, where the forces of nature are juxtaposed with the innocence of a child. The line “History is flicked over, / by a child's wet fingers” suggests a poignant contrast between fragility and enormity. The child’s gesture echoes how easily the past—human civilization, its achievements, its permanence—can be washed away when faced with forces older than recorded time. The “newborn swamp” rising and “heeding a more ancient call” gives the poem a mythic resonance, as though the earth itself remembers something we do not.
Overall, this poem succeeds in evoking mood, tension, and reflection. It serves as both a quiet warning and a lyrical elegy, reminding readers of nature’s cycles and the impermanence of human structures in the face of elemental power.
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Review by Hareem Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi sir!
It's my first day here and I just read what you have written. The first line won the game. Can you please give me some tips of good writing?
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