|Oh boy, here we go! Now the tension is building at a steady pace, as the Grin Reaper makes his way towards our merry crew! I like the contrast you have between the Grin Reaper and Pyramax, and the whole aura the Grin Reaper carries is just awesome (Was he inspired by the Joker? The laughing gas he uses reminds me of the Joker.). I only have one critique. In the sentence, " Davide, meanwhile, tried to play cool as a cucumber", the simile "cool as a cucumber" is not really needed, and is a little bit jarring and cliche. Instead, you can just say, "tried to play it cool". One of the most interesting aspects of your story is the character interactions; you have some good foil characters, and they work really well to help escalate tension, too. I believe that a story is only as good as its antagonists, and your Rogues Gallery is looking mighty fine! Keep up the good work!