I this poem! It is very heartfelt and touching, and I can truly feel the emotions you've poured into it. I'm reminded of a poem that I wrote myself not too long ago: "Invalid Item" , as well as my most recent one, "Invalid Item" . Perhaps you'll enjoy reading them as much as I've enjoyed reading this one.
Your spelling and grammar are wonderful; I see nothing to correct. Your rhythm is awesome, and keeps the poem flowing right along as it should. Great job! Keep up the great work! I look forward to reading more!
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