I like how this is written like more of a screenplay, my only suggestion is you proofread again, some of the sentences dont exactly make sense or the tenses dont fit. Otherwise great read, good job!
I like it alot good sir, i appreciate the firefighters creed at the end, because as a fellow volunteer firefighter i know where this story is coming from. I really like the dialoge and the language, it really fits well.
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