It is my pleasure to give you my opinion on this piece. Please keep in mind that any critique I give is only my humble attempt to explain what would have made the story better for me, and me alone.
Title: This is certainly a unique title and I think it was in keeping with the light humor of this story. However, and possibly because I was in the mood for action, it didn't really grab me and say, "Read On!!" Had I read this later in the day instead of between tasks at work, it probably would have suited my mood better.
Plot: This is basically a boy wants girl because he can't think of a better option. I love this kind of story. There is always a ring of truth to it because we guys are basically clueless anyway. The subtle humor that carried on throughout the story was great. If I were to critique this, it would be to strengthen the basic plot over those that would fight for attention. By this I mean, there was a little "Mother's boy" in there. Some "spoiled rich kid" and a dash of "How clueless can a guy really be." All of these contributed to the basic plot while, at the same time, made me think the story was about to turn more in their direction. I don't know if that makes sense or not.
Style and voice along with setting: I was never sure where this was taking place. It sounded British until, "Angela’s flat, as she liked to call it." If they really were in England, that statement would not be necessary. However, using terms like "blokes" says they are, in fact, in England. Also, and this is strange, the use of Honda Civic made me think United States. I'm sure they have those over there but...
Characters: I don't like Jeremy. That is actually a good thing. When I see a character that I really don't like and I'm not suppose to like, that means, to me, he/she is well developed.
Grammar: This is my weakest point so disregard if you have any doubt. the sentence, "While some blokes were independent and living the good life at twenty-four, Jeremy had not been lucky with his various jobs, and he depended on that allowance for his independence." had the word "independence" in it twice. I might suggest something like substituting the second one with pseudo-freedom or some other word.
Just my opinion: I always love to read your stories. I liked this one but if I could change only two things it would be to lose about 200 words and focus more on the negligence rather than the weather.