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Rated: E | (3.5)
Needs to be tighter. Keep verbs in pasted tense always, eliminate unnecessary adjectives:
This tedium persisted into evening, with daylight dwindling into dim twilight
should be
This tedium persisted into evening, with dwindled daylight into twilight
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