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Review by Jade Jaspers
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a great story. Your verses are very well wrote in the rhyme pattern you chose and the idea is as telling as is the form you wrote with. I found the last verse,
"Tales still tell of that dangerous year,
When the devilish beast had been slain,
When horror and fear were finally gone,
And peace, once again, was obtained." ...both summarized your verses very well and could very well lead to another writing with the same theme. Best Wishes, Jade Jaspers
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Review of Gilded cage  
Review by Jade Jaspers
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is one of the better verses I've read in a long while. It was easy to read, easy to understand and created a wonderful story for the reader. You did a great job with the presentation and I hope to read more of your writing. These words here:
Who would understand
the verses I made only for you?
What good is a free songbird
when it is tamed, loved and true?
...are so brilliantly composed I had to reread them to enjoy the depth they reach with such simple words. Thank you for posting this. Best Wishes, Jade Jaspers
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Review of A bird  
Review by Jade Jaspers
Rated: E | (4.5)
Very good writing here. Your words woke a very melancholy sense of action and created a very still scenery. I enjoyed reading it. Best Wishes, Jade Jaspers
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Review of They are me  
Review by Jade Jaspers
Rated: E | (5.0)
Interesting write. I particularly enjoyed, "The stranger stillness within waits alone with their mystery." Opened the imagination on to what could be described with such likeness. Thanks for posting. Enjoyed the reading.

Best Wishes, Jade Jaspers
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Review of Dog Parade  
Review by Jade Jaspers
Rated: E | (5.0)
What a cheerful piece of poetry. I can imagine the wonderful display of puppetry you must see everyday. Kudos on your rhyme scheme as well. I enjoyed it very much.

Best Wishes, Jade Jaspers
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Review of The Square  
Review by Jade Jaspers
Rated: E | (5.0)
What a quaint and intriguing writing. I enjoyed the dialogue you provided via conversation concerning something I personally have never heard of before in my life, a bread hook. Conjoined with the tense of explaining the object to a child made it appealing in a way that it was a simple conversation that included more than an explanation of a device the youngster had never heard of before and opened up the idea of communication about something far greater, a grandfather, whom as you related wasn't present in the child's life. The write involves the reader's imagination in a way that brings one to imagine what the speaker to the youth would be able to explain in such a way the child would be able to comprehend. The dialogue was well written with an easy and believable context that I believe most people could imagine taking place on any given day in many different places. Best Wishes.
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Review by Jade Jaspers
Rated: E | (5.0)
An immensely detailed narrative here full of relatable emotions that plague so many when couples in relationships turn away from their commitments. You wrote a very good description of what can often result from those types of woes. Best wishes.
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