|Warning: This in-depth review of The Coffee Shop, by Dragonbane could contain spoilers. Please read story before reading this review.
I’m not much for romance, especially strange romances, such as this. Typically this odd couple, separated by decades, is odd, but yet charming none the less. Though the story comes with every romance’s cheesiness.
Characters: The characters were pretty well put together. At the start I thought I could really care less for the characters, until you, as the writer, tested me by revealing one of them to have cancer. It’s a very good, smart, tactic to see just how much your readers care about the characters you’ve created.
Plot: the plot is sturdy and solid, and I’d definitely would recommend this story to anyone who enjoys a good romance story, but not for me. Even though it was, overall, a good story, that mostly depends on the reader. I don’t much enjoy romances, and this story is, sadly, no exception to that. It’s just another love story between a couple, except one of them is decades only then the other.
Grammar and spelling errors: There was many of parts I came across in your story that have comma issues, and I mean a lot. All the way from having a comma where you don’t need it, to having no comma where you do need one. There was also occasional wording errors. Your best bet is to go back and fix the issues you find.
Description: The description wasn’t all that bad, in fact it was pretty good. Some parts you might want to work on, but the description was pretty well done none the less. The coffee Shop itself was descripted perfectly the other places you may need work with. Other than that it’s quite fine.
I’m giving this story a 4 star, because of sturdy plot, testing your readers with your characters, and good descriptions, but the grammar and punctuation could still use some help.