Max, sorry it took longer than I thought it would to get to the first chapter of your book. Well, here goes. This is a very good first chapter. I've read "Time Guardian" and "time travel"stories in the past, but not quite like this first chapter indicates that this story will be like, and yes, I want to read more after reading this. Your time policing organization seems to be more complex than others I have encountered through my previous reading.
You present a lot of information about that organization in this first chapter. There seems to be a central "home office," which all of the different entities answer to and the different entities like time guardians (people who watch for anomalies in the timeline), people who live in each of the timelines (who may just be someone of that timeline, who has been chosen to be informed about the time watchers, I haven't figured that out yet), and others who get involved in correcting timeline issues.
To answer your questions:
Yes, it makes a lot of sense to me. If time is to be policed, there would have to be a rather large organization to monitor, fix, prevent . . . issues that might occur, if from no other source but their presence, from anomalies created by or the result of some previous anomaly, which would result in a cascade of anomalies through time. To me, it would seem that once experimentation begins, this type of organization would be inevitable.
The hook is great. Like I said, the subject is something everyone has thought about and wonders if some day it will be possible. Personally, I think everyone wishes for it to happen. Then we all might be able to go back in time and live something over . . . and so on.
The characters are alive. They seem human, with human desires, human frailties, human doubts, and they seem real.
The goals of the characters make sense for the circumstances they are thrust into by their jobs and by the problems around them. And of course the goals matter, otherwise time itself would unravel and where would that leave the world full of people in the present, past and future. That kind of includes everyone.
Finally, I think most anyone who reads this first chapter would want to continue reading, so keep it up and I'll read the next chapter within the next couple of days and let you know how that one reads to me.
Thank you for writing this and letting me read it.
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