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Review of Departure  Open in new Window.
Review by jeshimp Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
A very poignant story of a man losing his true love. From my reading, I think the man know his love was not coming back, and finding the ring was really no surprise. When I read it I was sad for the man. I think the story conveyed very well the feelings of the man.
Good work!

I had these minor comments as I read the story.
I was left hanging, not knowing what she knew. Maybe a hint could have been given by giving the title of the book she was reading.

"In the corner it was written, I’ll pay you back." I would have preferred the easier construction: "I'll pay you back was written in the corner"

My review comments don't really take away from the story.
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Review of The Old Man  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
An Awesome story. And tears did come to my eyes at the end of the story.
I have only one thing to offer as a critique and I don't know quite how to describe. As I was reading your story I came across phrases and actions that did not seem consistent. I can't really tell you where they are. I was into the story and not really paying attention to mechanics.
I believe you have a real gift of story-telling. Keep writing!
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Review of And There She Is  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I think I know where you're headed with this story. It's a good plot line.
I like your dialog between the characters. In just a short time, you have developed the characters and made them come alive.
I had some trouble visualizing the scene you paint in the last paragraph. ". . .the figure halted midair . . ."
I also think the last paragraph is a rather abrupt transition from conversation around the table to the fairly intense action scene.
All of that aside, I think you developing a pretty good story.
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Review by jeshimp Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
I enjoyed you poem. Certainly, everyone has asked the questions you posed at sometime. I particularly identify your questions in my situation as I describe in my story "Finding Friendship." It is true that the caregiver often neglects their own well-being. So, I ask myself your questions as I reflect on my lot in life. As you have written, there are often few answers.
Thank you for your insight.
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Review of Your Today  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
In four stanzas you have managed to capture the essence of the people who are just waiting for their wish to come true. For them opportunity chooses to pass by their door and go on to a door that is likely to open. It is sad to see people miss the joy and peace that comes from living in the present.
I will keep your poem on my desk where I can refer to it when I start wishing from things that will never come to pass.
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