I like how the setting is gradually revealed in this. The names of the characters are humorous and things began to make more sense as the story progressed. I guess the character's names sound like Viking names, but with your own vernacular flavor. Nicely done. I clocked the clue that Hiccup's mother had died before it was explicitly stated. It's good to help the reader feel like they are figuring stuff out. Some typos and it reads a bit clunky at times - Read it out loud and you will feel where it could read more smoothly. I think this piece needed a better ending, but not a different one (presuming this is a stand-alone piece). Think in terms of the ending of a song or a punchline to a joke - leave something to reveal right at the end.
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