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Review by johnfreeman010
Rated: XGC | (4.0)
The story itself is fine on its own. However, like your SSSBBW Monster Girl story, thisstory overestimates the size of the characters according to their weight.

I would suggest either to make the size of the characters closer to their known weight, which can be approximated by:

1. converting the mass from pounds to kilograms
2. divide the kilograms by 900 to get the volume in cubic meters
3. convert cubic meters to cubic feet
4. determine the best possible dimensions (length, width, and height) to make the character according to the volume of cubic feet

Alternatively, you could increase weight of the characters to match their desired size, which can be done by:

1. Finding the dimensions (length, width, and height) of the character in feet
2. Convert the dimensions of the character from feet to meters
3. Multiply the dimensions together to get the volume in cubic meters
4. Multiply the volume by 900 to get kilograms
5. Convert kilograms to pounds

It would probably be too late, but I hope I provided good enough advice.
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Review by johnfreeman010
Rated: XGC | (4.0)
The story itself is fine on its own. If I have one thing to criticize, it's that the story overestimates the size of the characters according to their weight. For example, Karin's weight is nearly 8 tons, which is the weight of an adult elephant. However, the story made it out that Karin's size is much, much larger than an elephant, which would be unrealistic as that would make her density as light as foam.

I would suggest either to make the size of the characters closer to their known weight, which can be approximated by:

1. converting the mass from pounds to kilograms
2. divide the kilograms by 900 to get the volume in cubic meters
3. convert cubic meters to cubic feet
4. determine the best possible dimensions (length, width, and height) to make the character according to the volume of cubic feet

Alternatively, you could increase weight of the characters to match their desired size, which can be done by:

1. Finding the dimensions (length, width, and height) of the character in feet
2. Convert the dimensions of the character from feet to meters
3. Multiply the dimensions together to get the volume in cubic meters
4. Multiply the volume by 900 to get kilograms
5. Convert kilograms to pounds

It would probably be too late, but I hope I provided good enough advice.
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