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I'm the lead editor for a small independent press, but I am on maternity leave for the next several years and thus not accepting submissions. I'll tell you my professional opinion on first chapters or short pieces and whether I would have accepted it or rejected it if I was looking for work. I've dealt most with controversial speculative fiction, and I'm most interested in polyamory a.k.a consensual non-monogamy.
Favorite Genres
Science Fiction, Historical Fiction, Fantasy, Romance, Dystopia, Erotica
Least Favorite Genres
stream of consciousness
Favorite Item Types
Short Stories, Novels, Fraternal Polyandry
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This was very informative and eye-opening. The control that your parents believe they should be allowed to exert over your love life reminds me of one of the first things I learned in my psychology courses: individualistic vs collectivistic cultures.

Personally, my parents have always allowed me to make my own decisions, and I've certainly learned a lot from some of those decisions.

I've been married for almost six years now, and we have a 3-year-old son. I'll be telling him my stories when he starts showing interest in dating, but I'll be letting him make his own decisions unless I think his safety is at risk.

Also, the part about your mom requiring you to buy a new car sounds like an absolute nightmare to me. I don't drive at all. It's partly for environmental reasons but also because I find having to be in control of huge vehicle going over 20mph absolutely terrifying. That's one of many reasons I'm getting myself screened for autism at the age of 35.

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Review of Heartbreak  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This provides a lot of food for thought. Thanks for giving my mind something to chew on.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

The beginning of this story seems familiar, but the rest of it is quite a surprise. You've woven an interesting tale indeed!

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

You’ve painted a vivid picture with your words. Thank you for taking me on this journey with you.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (3.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This was quite an intense story. Things happened too quickly for me to process them, though I suppose they happened too quickly for the protagonist to process as well.

Formatting tip: please start a new paragraph every time the speaker changes in dialogue. This is standard practice in fiction and helps make the piece easier to read.

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Review of Genesis  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

You've created some very relatable, likable characters here. Keep up the hard work, and I am sure you will weave a magnificent tale.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thank you for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is an intriguing concept.

Try avoiding forms of the verb “to be” such as is, are, was, were, etc. This is known as passive language. Using more colorful verbs can greatly strengthen your writing and cut down on unnecessary words.

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Review of LOVE  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

“Love is that condition in which the happiness of another person is essential to your own.”
― Robert A. Heinlein, Stranger in a Strange Land

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thank you for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start! Keep up the hard work, and I am sure you will weave a magnificent tale.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This makes me feel so nostalgic for my high school crushes. I can think of four names off the top of my head.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Your writing style does an excellent job of increasing immersion into this world. The characters are quite intriguing, too.

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Review of Serpent’s First  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thank you for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start! Keep up the hard work, and I am sure you will weave a magnificent tale.

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Review of Twenty-Four Years  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I also have a jacket with a missing zipper. I wear it because it feels right. I have other jackets that I've tried to get comfortable with, but there's always something about them that is uncomfortable to me. Same with shoes. Actually, I stick with sandals (Teva brand) because I had a lot of texture issues with socks while growing up. PE was the worst part of my day for multiple reasons, one of which was being forced to wear closed-toed shoes with socks. Don't even get me started on underwear. Those, among other reasons, are why I'm seeking an autism diagnosis at the age of 35. I attended elementary school in Texas, and Texas has the lowest rates of diagnosed autism, but there is no known reason why there would be fewer autistic people per capita in Texas, so for now, it's logical to conclude that autistic people in Texas are often not diagnosed during childhood. I do, however, have special ed records for being "emotionally disturbed" and not being good at reading the body language of my peers. I was in special ed and gifted programs at the same time.

Anyway, it strikes me that this character shows some autistic tendencies as well.

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Review of My partner  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thank you for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

You’ve painted a vivid picture with your words. Thank you for taking me on this journey with you.

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Review of Not My Body  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This was incredibly vivid and detailed. It brought up a lot of emotions for me as well. I suffered a lot less in terms of physical abuse, but the sleep deprivation from him yelling all night was the last straw. At the end, it wasn't so much about getting things for myself as it was about getting rid of things he thought looked good on me but didn't feel like me. Those things were a pretty small percentage of my wardrobe. Well . . . I did get an incense burner and some incense for me.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

With housing prices so high these days, I can't think of anyone who cares if there was a murder at a place.

The grammar in the first few paragraphs was good, but then there were run-on sentences, among other issues. I recommend getting a program that reads aloud to you for proofreading purposes. I use Natural Reader since I bought it many years ago, but these days, you can get tts programs for free or simply access them from your browser. Here is a nice, free one: https://ttsreader.com/

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is handy information. It could be even more compelling if you told a story about someone who used these tips.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This provides a lot of food for thought. Thanks for giving my mind something to chew on.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thank you for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Imperfections  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thank you for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Wedgie  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Is this meant to be a test piece or a placeholder? I recommend drafting your story in a separate program such as MS Word, Open Office, or Google Docs and then copying and pasting it when you are ready to share it.

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