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I'm the lead editor for a small press, and this is my pen name. I'll let you know whether I would have accepted your work as a submission and why or why not. If it's REALLY good, I'll let you know which press I'm with and invite you to submit your work to us. I'm particularly interested in controversial speculative fiction and polyamory a.k.a consensual non-monogamy.
Favorite Genres
Science Fiction, Historical Fiction, Fantasy, Romance, Dystopia, Erotica
Least Favorite Genres
stream of consciousness
Favorite Item Types
Short Stories, Novels, Fraternal Polyandry
Public Reviews
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

I love second person perspective, but this is peppered with first person perspective too. Did you originally write it one way and decide to change it later?

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of I fancied him!  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start, but it ends too abruptly. I assume there will be some exciting things to follow. I like how the narrator is very open about sex.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Tiny flowers  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

That was very intense. I'm not sure whether to think of this as an abortion, a suicide, a murder, or some combination of those. It reminds of a movie I saw that ended with a woman's death and then cut straight to a butterfly, indicating that she was now free.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

If it weren't for the homework problems in my math books, I probably wouldn't have cracked them either. I found that the teachers did a much better job of explaining things than the book. However, that changed in university with professors teaching the classes. The professors were there to do research, not to teach. I found that reading the book ahead of time and treating class as a review was the only way to stay on top of things.

The remark about wasted time and worthwhile things reminded me of this song:
https://youtu.be/8xe6nLVXEC0

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is an excellent point. We as humans cannot appreciate the good things in this life without knowing their opposites. The fact that we only have so much time to appreciate life makes it all the more precious.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of A Blind Date  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

Aw, the singing is the best part of church! I agree that Christmas and Easter masses are boring, but during the rest of the year, there's a lot more to learn.

Wow, that was quite a twist!

I wasn't focusing on grammar, but I didn't notice any errors.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of The Gift  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a fun piece, though I worry about him suffocating in there. You gave the characters a lot of depth in only a few words.

I wasn't focusing on grammar, but I didn't notice any errors.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

I enjoyed this piece a lot. It brings in some fresh perspectives and provides a lot of food for thought. If I was curating an anthology of science fiction, I would love to include a piece like this.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Real Version  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (2.5)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a lovely sentiment, but it needs more exploration. What are the benefits of being ourselves? How do we go about becoming the real version of ourselves?

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is sad and beautiful at the same time. It reminds me of my experiences with my first love, except I drove him away for different reasons. I pressured him for sex because I thought he had to be my everything. Sex is very important to me, but he's asexual. I didn't know at the time that I had other options. That was back in 2007, and I still love him to this day. My solution was to stop believing in "the one." I find "the one" a rather depressing and debilitating concept these days. There are many people I can love, and loving a new person never means I have to stop loving the people I already love. That is what polyamory is about. I'm married and pregnant for the first time now, but there is still room for my first love if he ever decides to comes back into my life.

I also like how you use "former" instead of ex. I do this for people who are still welcome in my life. I only have one ex but several former lovers.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a very sweet poem. My best friend served in the Air Force, and my husband served in the Navy, so they're not exactly soldiers, but people in the military tend to go through similar hardships.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

Two things I love in one story: brothers and sunflowers! It doesn't get much better than this. Thanks for sharing this truly delightful story.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Ask of God  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a lovely piece. It reminds me of one of my favorite Church songs: https://youtu.be/RF0DIpFOoBg

God has certainly led me down some interesting roads.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start. There is a lot of detail here, but some of the dialogue doesn't feel natural. Dialogue can be a difficult skill to perfect, so keep working on it, and I am sure you will improve.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thanks for sharing this. Some parts were difficult for me to understand due to the grammar, but I am glad you are doing your best to spread this information.

"had adverse on social" seems to be missing a word after "adverse"

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Эссе  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

I used my internet browser to translate this to English, so I will not comment on the grammar.

This sounds like a very solid and thorough plan. Good luck with your thesis!

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of ЭССЕ  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (1.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

I only see question marks, numbers, and a few bits of punctuation here.

Is this meant to be a test piece or a placeholder? I recommend drafting your story in a separate program such as MS Word, Open Office, or Google Docs and then copying and pasting it when you are ready to share it.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Эссе  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (1.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

I only see a bunch of question marks and a few numbers here. It looks similar to another piece I saw earlier.

Is this meant to be a test piece or a placeholder? I recommend drafting your story in a separate program such as MS Word, Open Office, or Google Docs and then copying and pasting it when you are ready to share it.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of ЭССЕ  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (1.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

I only see a bunch of question marks and a few numbers here.

Is this meant to be a test piece or a placeholder? I recommend drafting your story in a separate program such as MS Word, Open Office, or Google Docs and then copying and pasting it when you are ready to share it.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Oofff  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (1.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

Is this meant to be a test piece or a placeholder? "OOOOOOOOOOFFFFFFFF" is the only thing I see in this piece so far. I recommend drafting your story in a separate program such as MS Word, Open Office, or Google Docs and then copying and pasting it when you are ready to share it.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Roman & Barbarian  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

This was a delightful piece. It had a lovely mix of humor and warmth. The ending was particularly sweet.

I wasn't focusing on grammar, but I didn't notice any errors.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Chimera  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

This really sang to my inner nerd. I love characters who are neither perfectly good nor perfectly bad. The boy had clear motivations for what he did.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Life Story  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (3.5)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thanks for sharing this lovely story of your life.

There are several run-on sentences in this. I also recommend organizing this into shorter paragraphs for easier reading.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

These are good things to know. My budget is so tight that I don't feel comfortable eating out with or without the pandemic, but I'm glad people are coming up with innovative ways to deliver food.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Self-Worth?  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon this through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is good advice. On the rare occasions I have struggled with self-worth, I have never struggled for long. Then again, my parents have always taught me to do things that make me happy.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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