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I'm the lead editor for a small independent press, but I am on maternity leave for the next several years and thus not accepting submissions. I'll tell you my professional opinion on first chapters or short pieces and whether I would have accepted it or rejected it if I was looking for work. I've dealt most with controversial speculative fiction, and I'm most interested in polyamory a.k.a consensual non-monogamy.
Favorite Genres
Science Fiction, Historical Fiction, Fantasy, Romance, Dystopia, Erotica
Least Favorite Genres
stream of consciousness
Favorite Item Types
Short Stories, Novels, Fraternal Polyandry
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Review of The Emerald Frame  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

You've painted a vivid picture with your words. Thank you for taking me on this journey with you.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

You've painted a vivid picture with your words. Thank you for taking me on this journey with you.

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Review of A Huge Disaster  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I love time travel stories and how they always lead to incredible adventures. You did a great job with this one.

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Review of The Letter  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

You've conveyed some powerful emotions here. Indeed, war sucks.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is handy information. It could be even more compelling if you told a story about someone who used these tips.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This sounds like a unique world. Keep up the hard work, and I am sure you will weave a magnificent tale.

Try avoiding forms of the verb “to be” such as is, are, was, were, etc. This is known as passive language. Using more colorful verbs can greatly strengthen your writing.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This was very informative and a smooth read. Thanks for bringing this to my attention.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I've been there. This reminds me of an experience after my first love. It was very good for me because it showed me that I could love again.

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Review of SELFISH LOVE  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a very good reminder. I think more people need to hear this message.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This conveys a very strong mood. I've had similar moments, though I don't have many opportunities these days.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start! Keep up the hard work, and I am sure you will weave a magnificent tale.

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Review of The Beast  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This provides a lot of food for thought. Thank you for giving my brain something to chew on.

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Review of Arthur's Return  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This was a delightful read. I like the tone you used in this piece.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This provides a lot of food for thought. I believe I have faced demons of this nature.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thank you for sharing these deeply personal thoughts. Writing about these things is a great way to process your feelings and let others who have had similar experiences know they are not alone.

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Review of Almost Immortal  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start! Keep up the hard work, and I am sure you will weave a magnificent tale.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I used my internet browser to translate this to English, so I will not comment on the grammar.

This reminds me a lot of how I felt about my first love. Cherish those feelings, but move on if needed.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

You've painted a vivid picture with your words. Thank you for taking me on this journey with you.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of My introduction  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (3.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is short and to-the-point. It could benefit from some more sentence variety. 7 out of 8 sentences start with "I." It is expected for many sentences to start with "I" when writing in first person, but it does make the piece dull to read if too many sentences have the same structure.

Example on how to change sentence structure:
I love my family members and they also love me. --> My family members and I share a bond of love.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (1.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This implies that there is something bad about being an old person. I don't understand how 40 out of 40 people could feel pity over a person getting older.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review of Mystic Eyes  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This was a very sensual poem. It reminds me a bit of a song about a moth drawn to a flame.

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Review of THE ICON  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I'm sorry to hear you had to go through that with your mother. My mother lost her mother to cancer as well, and her education was impacted as well.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

You've painted a vivid picture in just a few words.

I noticed some shifting between past and present tense. Please pick one and do your best to stick with it.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This isn't the first time I've heard about this. I don't watch SNL, so specific examples of things they've talked about that aren't funny would help me to understand the problem better.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Thank you for these grim reminders. Have you ever heard of Father Nathan Monk? He's a former priest, but he keeps the "Father" title because he provides services for those who were rejected by the church but still desire a sense of belonging among a community of believers. He does gay weddings, etc. I also find a lot of comfort in his work.

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