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Review of When you walk in  
Review by KagomeShuko
Rated: E | (4.0)
I feel this was written thinking of a certain person, yes?
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Review by KagomeShuko
Rated: E | (3.5)
It's nice. I'd have to say that it just tells a very straightforward story. If that's what you want, it'd good. However, if it's not what you want, and you want more feeling or emotion, there need to be more descriptions. The person is on your mind - racing though it? In every thought? In your dreams even when you don't think about the person?

How do you know the person looks calm? Like melting ice cream in the summer calm? You love that person. Why? Is it tearing at your heart? What is it?
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Review of Man, Interrupted  
Review by KagomeShuko
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This was great. I've not had problems with addictions, but I've heard that's how it can make people think. I watch Craig Ferguson and he's talked about how alcoholism is and how it makes you not think correctly. This gives me the feeling of how one tries and tries to live without it, but the body keeps saying how much it needs that alcohol.
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Review by KagomeShuko
Rated: E | (1.0)
Do not use "adjectives" when nouns or verbs are needed! I can easily count the three words that should be nouns instead of adjectives. Why is there only one noun. Hair doesn't feel like an adjective. Hair feels LIKE a noun. Otherwise, it is, "his hair feels [an adjective]." His voice is like a NOUN that's been VERB PAST TENSE (just so happened my adjective worked.) Breath painted with a NOUN.
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Review by KagomeShuko
Rated: E | (2.5)
I think you may have some of these words incorrect. I'm reading the poem on a website and I know it's correct as I read it. He came out of? What? The second letter an I and the last one an E . . . and I can't find that. There are a few others I can't find, either. Some are okay. However, you really should make the clues clearer.
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Review of Rock Bands  
Review by KagomeShuko
Rated: E | (1.0)
If you can't spell "Led Zeppelin," don't make a crossword with that as one of the answers since it never goes correctly.
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