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Review by kazoo kid
Rated: E | (3.0)
I liked the story and what you were going for, but the use of "dinosaur" was a lot. Instead maybe use species or another phrase.
And when you wrote, "the dinosaur thought." you said it again 1 sentence later. Maybe use another synonym for thought.
I am A newbie but I have to make a living someway on here ya know?
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Review by kazoo kid
Rated: E | (4.0)
You got all the aspects of a home, especially the awkward silence...
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