I found this relatively well-written, with a satisfying conclusion. Overall, a good read. I did find the amount of quotation marks a bit jarring, the narrative would be smoother with a few less. Of course, the protagonist is a writer, so I suppose we should be glad they aren’t plagiarizing that lovely old lady’s words.
This is why you never use common words in your summoning name! Forever getting pulled away from your dinner by rude idiots who don’t even want to make a deal, ugh.
I enjoyed this little story, and the ending was excellent. Thanks for sharing it!
Another excellent ending, and the spots you've chosen for chapter breaks are really good as well. I liked the addition of Pegasus - I can definitely see him causing trouble in the future, he seems like he'll be full of mischievous fun. Again, I have to keep reading because the story won't let me stop.
I can't say that I enjoyed reading this, because, well, it's what we're all living. But it's extremely well written. The line about the Kool-Aid got me right in my feelings, envisioning sick children. Really good job on this.
If I'm being completely honest, I didn't expect to like this story as much as I do. I'm not usually into fanfiction, but this is quite well done. I don't know the world you're sourcing the setting from, but this story makes me want to. The polyamory is addressed fairly well, although it does result in a lot of characters, which can get hard to track. The ending has a good hook, it leaves you wanting to know what happened next. Overall, this was well written and an enjoyable read.
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