Hi, this was very descriptive and had good dialogue. I liked the fact that it was about a wraith who used a missing boy as a siren, to lure innocent victims. Good job and write on.
Hi, this is very well written. I like the fact that you write about how werewolves are in powers. This is quite descriptive and intriguing, I am interested to find out what happens after he becomes werewolf.
Your very descriptive, I liked how you set this in a haunted b & b. Your characters were well developed and the story flowed nicely. Good job and write on
Hello there, I liked how this was set around two lost souls finding each other. It was creative, with well drawn characters, you have good dialogue. I was drawn into this sad story. Your story was believable. Good job and write on.
This was a riveting story, with great detail and intensity. I liked how the vampire pursued it's prey unaware that she was being hunted. As I continued to read I found myself being drawn in. However the end was predictable. Good job and right on
Hello there, I liked your perspective on pain and abuse and from that comes hope, love and gratitude. This was very well written although it could be more emotionally in depth. We know what they went through and are going through but what are they feeling. It could be more descriptive, what do the characters look like? Where are they from?
Hi, I like the concept of an adulterous wife tempting her husbands co-worker while he's at work and has an affair with them right under his nose. It does get kind of confusing towards the end, is the wife a witch or something because all of a sudden Ned went from being a human to being an animal. The characters and scenery need to be described, you have good emotional depth, and dialogue. good job and write on.
hello there, I like the concept of woman buying a fixer upper and moving into it and then finding out that it's haunted. You need to do a read through since you left out some words. You have good description, emotional depth, and outer conflict. where the main character faces the supernatural. good job and write on.
hello Thomas browning, I always enjoy a good fairy tale, and I like the concept of this one. Children building a snow maiden as a hunter heads out on his daily hunt and like most of the Grimm's Fairy tales this didn't have a happy ending. You have good description, emotional depth and flow. good job and write on.
Hello Toemoss, this had a creepy feel to it, I like the concept and that the main character is lured in by a garage sale to her possible doom. You have good description, and outer conflict. good job and write on.
Hello prosperous snow, I like the concept but the story line needs to be expanded on like maybe give us a little history about witchland, go into more detail about the ninth daughter what does she look like. Is there conflict with family or community. good job and continue to create
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