Really great romney skinny got on this one I love the poem and it's layout very well done! You have an interesting time line and your poem as well as a story from beginning to end. I get a really interesting message from it. It's like we're holding mirror up 2 our selves and to the rest of the world. This is a great submission. Finally done. I like the way you put your words together and there's magic in it so please keep on writing and I will say there's nothing wrong with it. Esthetically or with grammar anything like that. This is a great job and I wish you all the best
Wow you are the master of haikus! Very well done. I'm sorry you went through that!
This is a very well put together poem. You obviously understand the haiku? Better than. Most and your word choices and subject matter? I find poinient, sad and hopeful but also lovely at the same time. I find no issues with spelling subject matter sentenced structure and none of that but all looks very well done! Thank you if you are submission when I hope you seem more have good evening!
A profound write. It has a clear message designed to encourage and shine a light. And you are right seeking happiness is not difficult because it lies within each and every one of us. It is a gift. A gift we give to ourselves on a daily basis. A decision. When we open our eyes each day we decide.
Ha ha ha ha... This one is hilarious! Super clever in a very well Recent piece of work!
A pleasure to read and look forward to seeing more of your submissions. Thank you for the smile very much appreciated! Good luck and they are all your endeavors be fruitful!
Well I'm gonna say this is very well written. It is concise it is helpful it is in depth and it is also very understandable so for this, Thank you very much!
This is a fine example of helping our community within this website Excellent work!
I just didn't get yesterday an interesting time bopping around the website. We're on the track to Philadelphia get a review section but the lower button that says your custom view after I feelgium properly there it is would not. Allow me to look it so I don't know Why. Awesome and great it makes a person feel like they're wanted so thank you very much for that!
This is an interesting poem ith an interesting subject matter. cantaloupe is kind of fine looking isn't it?
It skin looks a bit like a brain. Having said that I found your poem esthetically pleasing. I find no issues with grammar sentence structure or spelling. If I might make one small suggestion on your last stanza third line down. Assuming that syllable count is not an issue? May I suggest a small switch you're not lying to say, "And soon you will discover, it's really quite tough" what do you think? And no insult to your poem as it's quite lovely just the way it. I hope you have a wonderful evening and I thank you so much for your submission!
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