|This is a dark poem but it has a great theme - the way that towns everywhere are being ravaged by something - be it the economic crisis, war, natural disasters etc. The emotional pull of the place you grow up, it stays with you long into adult-hood, and this is something that as a writer you have captured beautifully.
If I were to critique anything, it would just be to keep an eye on the general flow of the poem (poetry is objective, this is just my opinion, I know others will disagree). There were a few lines that I had to re-read to find the word flow again.
But the poem itself paints an incredible mental picture, and that is a skill that cannot be taught. You should be really pleased with this, it's a great piece.
Keep Writing!! x