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Review by LauraP
Rated: E | (4.0)
Very nicely written. You captured a moment and emotion frozen in time. I especially liked the repetition of the first two lines at the end of your poem. My only suggestion, and it is a minor one, is that the word "slip" needs to be "slips" only to make it agree with the noun/verb tense of moment. Otherwise quite nice.
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