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Review by Jeremy Janssen
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hey! I really like the simplicity of this story. I reminds me of the story book days! One recommendation that I would give would be to look over the dialogue, especially in the begining of the story. It sounds a little off, maybe try reading it out loud? I could defiantly see myself reading this story when I was younger, well done!
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Review by Jeremy Janssen
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Nice read. I usally don't go for this kind of story but I liked yours.



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