|Ryan and Maggie’s greatest contribution to Hades, however, wasn’t the recruiting numbers; it was BOB. BOB was a computer program envisioned by Ryan and written by Maggie. BOB facilitated communication between all 24 Divisions in Hades–North America so that they could collaborate in their recruiting work. After all, most recruits weren’t one-dimensional. For example, a topsider might start with depression, then move to drugs, then crime, then back to depression. Of course, all divisions had a stake in each recruit, because BOB would award each division that took part in the recruiting a fraction of the number for reporting purposes. That was 25 years ago. Since that time, both Maggie and Ryan had been transferred all over the sprawling cooperation, training junior managers and overhauling entire divisions. Currently, Maggie was held the position of Chief Technology Assistant , and Ryan worked as Senior Manager of North America Recruiting.
The last sentence it says Maggie was held the position...it should be Maggie held the position...
Besides that it's great dang good, very interesting twist.
Do they get out though? Maybe a part two going a little deeper into his relationship with his Grandma, why he did, and why it's her that can save not just him bit both of them.