I like how you titled it "Consuming Desire" as if the person was a "desire". I always like detailed poems because they give you a strong sense of visual. Lots of personifications. But I don't really understand what the poem is talking about. Is "he" a real thing?
I like how you named your article. It's smart. I think you should you should put more detail in how it reminded you of your childhood memories. More details are always nice. I also think that the fudge should be one paragraph. Other than that, I really like it!
I like your story! It's sooo positive! It's true too! When people say you're not special, we actually are! You proved those people wrong! Everyone's a child of the King. So that makes everyone special, just like how you said in your article.
I like the story. Is the main character supposed to represent you in real life or is it just some character you made up? Are there any other sequels? Because if there are, I'd like to read them! I didn't understand the beginning. Is he renting a building? Other than that, I thought your story is great!
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