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Review by Lisa Grove46311
Rated: E | (4.0)
I personally have never read a Sijo poem before so I googled what type of form is used. I was surprised to learn it is older than haiku.

The author has adhered to the correct form in lines 1, 2 and 3 syllable counts.

Line 1 introduces the theme
Line 2 develops the theme
Line 3 presents a twist

Overall I enjoyed reading it and learning about this Korean Poetic form so thank you for sharing it.
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Review of My Legacy  
Review by Lisa Grove46311
Rated: E | (2.0)
I love the sentiment of writing to an unborn child. The author in the first paragraph has painted a picture of herself that seems honest as we all have good and bad traits to our personalities.
She is trying to tell the story of herself to her unborn child and I am wondering as the reader why she has chosen to write about her stubbornness instead of wishes and dreams for Frank. I think the second paragraph is in need of editing.
I love the idea of what you are writing I just think you need to expand on your thoughts of what your legacy is going to be for Frank. Overall I enjoyed reading.
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