This is a great example of an acrostic poem. In just a few sentences, you did a great job expressing your feelings and passions for music. I especially liked the "please play it again?"
The only things I'd like to point out is the first M. Instead of the first word being Mostly, I'd change it into an a noun or adjective. Just as an example I'd say
Melody, All / What I can hear, a
Uni... and so on.
Also, I think it'd have a better sound if instead of "Can you please play it again" I would say "Could you please play it again."
But of course, this is my opinion and I'd say this poem is a great piece! A great, expressive poem. I can relate to your love of the song! Great work, keep writing!
~LifeFinder~
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