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6 Public Reviews Given
Favorite Genres
Fantasy, Sci-Fi, Adventure, Comedy, Crime, Detective
Least Favorite Genres
Romance, Drama, Non-Fiction,
Public Reviews
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Review of The Pack  
Review by SJ Longtaile
Rated: E | (5.0)
Such a beautiful and heart warming piece, as a lover of wolves, canines, and various other animals myself, I can't help but feel a little jealous of the experience.

To have such a deep and seamless connection with a pack you can call your own is a beautiful thing.

As I read this, the wolf I'm sure resides in my own heart was howling with you.

Many well wishes from my heart to yours.
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Review of One world  
Review by SJ Longtaile
Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
Very powerful and emotional message.

English isn't your native language so there are some formatting and dialogue issues that make it hard to read.

I would recommend working with someone who's first language is English, discuss with them what you are trying to convey with each sentence and then rewriting and reformatting with their help.
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Review by SJ Longtaile
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Artfully done, brilliant display of craft well mastered, Tolkien-esque comes to mind as a description.
I'm not usually one to read this particular style of writing, but I found I could not tear my eyes away, like Cadoc, I was enthralled from the first moment the red-haired witch appeared.

As a fellow writer, I bow before your skill and pray to the Gods of Creativity that I may one day attain such a level as the one you stand upon.
Bravo :)
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Review of The Sleeper  
Review by SJ Longtaile
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Very interesting, an entombed goddess, waiting ever so patiently. I almost felt sorry for the grave robbers, but one enters the tomb of the lion headed goddess at their own peril.

Some notes;
"But it that was too much effort." - this happens a lot to me as well, I change my mind mid type and don't notice until much later.

"There was two of them." - technically this works, but personally, I would say 'there were', that's just me though.

"Tried researching out to them."

Otherwise, well done :)
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