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6 Public Reviews Given
Favorite Genres
Fantasy, Sci-Fi, Adventure, Comedy, Crime, Detective
Least Favorite Genres
Romance, Drama, Non-Fiction,
Public Reviews
Review of The Pack  
Review by SJ Longtaile
Rated: E | (5.0)
Such a beautiful and heart warming piece, as a lover of wolves, canines, and various other animals myself, I can't help but feel a little jealous of the experience.

To have such a deep and seamless connection with a pack you can call your own is a beautiful thing.

As I read this, the wolf I'm sure resides in my own heart was howling with you.

Many well wishes from my heart to yours.
Review of One world  
Review by SJ Longtaile
Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
Very powerful and emotional message.

English isn't your native language so there are some formatting and dialogue issues that make it hard to read.

I would recommend working with someone who's first language is English, discuss with them what you are trying to convey with each sentence and then rewriting and reformatting with their help.
Review by SJ Longtaile
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Artfully done, brilliant display of craft well mastered, Tolkien-esque comes to mind as a description.
I'm not usually one to read this particular style of writing, but I found I could not tear my eyes away, like Cadoc, I was enthralled from the first moment the red-haired witch appeared.

As a fellow writer, I bow before your skill and pray to the Gods of Creativity that I may one day attain such a level as the one you stand upon.
Bravo :)
Review of The Sleeper  
Review by SJ Longtaile
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Very interesting, an entombed goddess, waiting ever so patiently. I almost felt sorry for the grave robbers, but one enters the tomb of the lion headed goddess at their own peril.

Some notes;
"But it that was too much effort." - this happens a lot to me as well, I change my mind mid type and don't notice until much later.

"There was two of them." - technically this works, but personally, I would say 'there were', that's just me though.

"Tried researching out to them."

Otherwise, well done :)
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