|W. D. Wilcox,
I love the imagery you have given here, the only thing that made me stumble as I was reading was this paragraph;
"She spun around then, in the opposite direction, as her entrails were jerked brutally from behind, and then made a weak, gagging sound as the last of her guts tore free."
I would suggest tweaking it just a little; "She spun around in the opposite direction as her entrails were jerked were jerked brutally from behind, she made a weak gagging sound, as the last of her guts tore free."
However, the description is incredible and really pushed me to want more, will be getting the full story.