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43 Public Reviews Given
Review Style
I don't like to pick things apart. One of the reasons for this is that my perspective may not match the intelligence level of the author, so I like to keep it simple.
I'm good at...
Picking up on grammar and structure.
Favorite Genres
Fiction, Horror, Mystery, Sci-Fi
Least Favorite Genres
Political, Religion,
Favorite Item Types
Short Stories
Least Favorite Item Types
Essays, Articles
Public Reviews
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Review of Frozen  
Review by Luckie 🍀
Rated: E | (5.0)
I envy whoever you wrote this for. It's so honest and genuine, there's so much love here! I like how you referenced the Broadway play and tied it to your feelings towards this person. Towards the end, it almost seems as if this person is no longer in your life, but the memory of them will stand forever, frozen in time as you say.

Beautiful stanzas and rhyme scheme. You structured it very well! This is a testament to how poetry flows so easily when it means something more than just words! Kudos! Great job!!!
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Review of The Road of Life  
Review by Luckie 🍀
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I loved the way you structured your stanza's here. The way you kept the rhymes consistent was very accurate! I'm no expert but I can tell just by the way you designed it that you're very good at this. I also like how everything circles back around to how the road is travelled many ways. Brilliant!

As for the message here, I couldn't agree more. This is definitely relatable to me, especially the line that describes how our choices can lead us sideways. Gotta keep moving forward, always!

Amazing work, here!!!
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Review by Luckie 🍀
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
At first, just by reading the title, I wasn't sure about what I was getting in to. Then, after some skimming, I am glad I read it! I love this tale about a little mouse with a big...ego lol who ends up getting sought out by some gangster rats. I thought it was hilarious. Aside from a few grammatical issues (you may want to run this through Grammarly) the only other thing I would suggest would be to separate your paragraphs with a full blank line in between. Otherwise, I just may keep an eye out for more tales about this little mouse *Wink*
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Review by Luckie 🍀
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
This is a really cute story! I enjoy the way you describe the different ways Penny was trying to get out of the tree, and the fact that the animals were torturing her too is hilarious! I saw a few grammatical errors, you may want to run this story through Grammarly real quick. Another thing I noticed was that a lot of your paragraphs are one long sentence that could be broken down, and in doing so would make it less wordy!
Otherwise, great job!
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Review by Luckie 🍀
Rated: E | (5.0)
Beautiful poem! I can see why it was nominated. Sometimes it's hard to pick up the pieces, and it's good to have something to turn to that helps us through, to keep moving. Great job!
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Review of UNSPOKEN  
Review by Luckie 🍀
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is so heartfelt. It seems that if you told this person how you felt, perhaps you would not have lost them. Here's hoping this person at least knows how you feel, someday. Great poem, though. I think it's very moving, I can really feel the sense of your loneliness. Sad; my heart goes out to you. *HeartBroken*
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Review by Luckie 🍀
Rated: E | (5.0)
*House* You said you haven't written poems since you were a child? I would not have been able to guess that!

This is a great poem! I love the link between each line, and how you brought it back around at the end! Very clever! It's so heart-felt, too! Great job! *ThumbsUpL**ThumbsUpR*
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Review of A Bite  
Review by Luckie 🍀
Rated: E | (5.0)
I can tell you put so much heart and feeling into this poem. I really liked the way you choreographed the rhyming scheme. I like the like "the secrets I hold, they are my gold." I thought this was a really powerful line and how you associated it with sharing some, like you might a small fortune to someone who was truly deserving. But then at the end it seems that maybe you were still waiting for that person to make an appearance.
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Review of Hasta La Vista  
Review by Luckie 🍀
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
*GiftR*I enjoyed reading this! I was drawn in by the title and description of the poem. I was expecting it to be about a landlord who's had a fling with one of their tenants then had a change of heart when they didn't pay the bill. I thought this was very creative!!!*GiftR*
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Review of Ooey Gooey  
Review by Luckie 🍀
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Donut7* Story Overview: George the graveyard worker was an overworked, regular guy who was minding his own business when he's overcome by a miscellaneous goo hiding in the leaves!

*ThumbsUp* What I enjoyed:
*BurstB* Love your use of the scrapes and scratches. Definitely a creepy element!
*BurstB* The description of him scratching himself with the rake. *shudder* brilliant
*BurstB* The raking at the end was great!

*ExclaimV* Hiccups:
*DropV* "What it did seem to be doing..." this sentence seemed a bit wordy.
*DropV*

*BareTree* Overall Impression: I can only imagine what it's like to be the groundskeeper at a graveyard. It would take a character such as George to be humble enough not to believe in stereotypes and the like. Perhaps maybe he should have, being taken over by the ominous goo! I loved this story, you did a great job describing the setting and the little details that make a person's hair stand up! Write on!
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Review of The Shift  
Review by Luckie 🍀
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
*Donut7* Story Overview: A human begins by writing in her journal, hopeful for escape, dead or alive. There were other humans but they were all murdered, leaving the main character alone. By the end of the story, the main character has "shifted" into a werewolf.

*ThumbsUp* What I enjoyed:
*BurstB* loved the way you describe the room your main character was trapped in
*BurstB* you perfectly described how your character ended up in this situation
*BurstB* I also loved how you described how the character felt in the midst of the shift from human to werewolf.

*ExclaimV* Hiccups:
*DropV* you mention your character giving a speech but I see no specific references to why the character had given it.
*DropV* if the character truly didn't want to be a part of them, maybe the character could have shown more of a struggle
*DropV* where did the crowd come from? The setting transition seems a bit confusing.


*BareTree* Overall Impression:
This character you've created sounds like maybe they secretly wanted to be turned. mostly because of the speech and how the character didn't put up much of a struggle when it came time to be bitten. I was a bit thrown off when trying to envision the setting, but overall I still felt the fear and anxiety of the character awaiting the next thing and deciding at the end that the past was just that, and everything is different now. Great Job!!
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Review by Luckie 🍀
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
*ThumbsUp* What I enjoyed:
*BurstB* I wasn't sure what to expect when I read the title! Such a cute ending to tie it all together!

*ExclaimV* Hiccups:
*DropV*none

*BareTree* Overall Impression:: I enjoyed this simple and short tale of the mind of a child and how they express themselves! I can only imagine the look on the little one's face that made Paul continuously ask!
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Review of Rock Climbing  
Review by Luckie 🍀
Rated: E | (4.5)
*ThumbsUp* What I enjoyed:
*BurstB*The ending was great, I wasn't expecting that!

*ExclaimV* Hiccups:
*DropV*none

*BareTree* Overall Impression:
Thanks for sharing your experience with this! I can't imagine how it felt to be stuck, hope you didn't panic too hard! I was left wondering whether you went climbing again the next day! Great little story here!
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Review by Luckie 🍀
Rated: E | (4.5)
What a beautiful poem about unicorns! Thank you for sharing your vision of unicorns and how their freedom must not be tainted by one's greed to own something that can never be owned! I loved how you illustrated the setting as a bystander just watching the unicorns frolic about. Great Job!
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Review by Luckie 🍀
Rated: E | (4.0)
What a fun piece of poetry. For a minute, I thought I was reading something written by Dr. Seuss! This must have been very fun to write, because it was definitely fun to read! After going over the prompt, I'm a little miffed that I didn't get a chance to participate in this one! Great Job!
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Review by Luckie 🍀
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Dang. You really put things into perspective, here. I, personally, am not into politics, I just try to ignore them because of the emotions they inflict on the general populous. Since the title was called, "History Repeating Itself," You really capitalized on the fact that history repeats itself because of the fact that we not only ignore the past, but try to change or delete it, altogether. (Ex. When you said "..politicians, who want to bottle history using their own recipe). This is a fantastic analogy! Well Done!! *ThumbsUpL* *ThumbsUpR*
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Review of Surprise  
Review by Luckie 🍀
Rated: E | (4.5)
This was very cute! The ending was great! The suspense was killing me, I couldn't wait to find out what was in her backpack! I was also interested to find that her 3-year-old was already a proficient liar. That's not something I see everyday! Way to go!
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Review by Luckie 🍀
Rated: E | (4.5)
Luck is a fickle thing, isn't it! I liked the creativity here, it almost had a looney tunes feel with the piano falling and all. I like how you illustrate the duality of luck, it can be bad or good, or sometimes it's both or neither! I can see how this piece was a winner! Great job!
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Review by Luckie 🍀
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
So awesome to see another tarot reader in this community. I could picture every card as you were describing them, the meanings were on another level than those who have no knowledge of this type of divination. You have such a deep soul, especially with Death and Judgement in the spread AND the Kind of Swords. At some point I was expecting the Tower to make an appearance. Thank you for sharing this part of your soul. I truly enjoyed it.
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Review by Luckie 🍀
Rated: E | (5.0)
Reading this makes me want to go exploring! (New heights, you could say)! I can only imagine how many steps there were, along with that feeling you get when you look back at the ground you've already covered! I liked the simplicity of your poem, it wasn't at all hard to grasp the excitement and the triumph! 👍👍😊
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Review by Luckie 🍀
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Wow! I LOVED reading this! The way you describe the visions, she was having along with the emotion Cecile felt about being around the white men, it was all so authentic! Her obligation to work for them and against them had a very real feel to it. Your writing style is engaging, I'm glad I stumbled up this!
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Review by Luckie 🍀
Rated: E | (4.0)
Cute! I loved the beginning because my husband is the same way. I tell him he snores but he denies it. I'm getting that Alice was driven to madness by Ken's snoring, due to lack of sleep. I feel like maybe Ken would have put up a struggle while he was being suffocated, though. The last sentence in the first paragraph, I feel like you overused the word "so." I still enjoyed it, though! Great job!!
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Review by Luckie 🍀
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Well... this was...interesting. Great! It was titillating, to say the least. If you were going for sci-fi erotic, you definitely nailed it! Overall it was a fun read, although I'm not sure if you're writing this for a video game dialogue or what, (the "Saves Location" is what threw me.) Though I don't have much experience with reading whatever genre this is. Nonetheless it was still fun. I saw a few grammatical errors, you may want to use a program like Grammarly or a similar application to smooth out the edges. Other than that, great job!
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Review by Luckie 🍀
Rated: E | (4.0)
I love the statements you have made here. Ethics should never be without regard, most especially when it comes to journalism. I appreciate that you have taken the time to write this article to inform people of the importance of ethical behavior, because not very many people, today, even know what that even means. That being said, I thought your article was fantastic, though I saw a few grammatical errors, you may want to use Grammarly or a similar application to clean it up a bit. Otherwise, great job, and thank you!👍
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Review of Pluming  
Review by Luckie 🍀
Rated: E | (4.5)
Such truth put so simply! Will the plumbing ever work correctly? And how much is it going to cost each time? Surely the plumber is tired of seeing the same number on the call screen. Were you having plumbing issues when you wrote this? I can feel the energy of frustration, anyway. Fun read!! Great job!
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