|Second line: And the wind sings songs of joy.
The words coupled together sings songs breaks the tongue. You are slowed in speech and even if just for a moment.
And the wind CAROLS songs of joy.
And the wind CHANTS songs of joy.
Bread is made into the Son,
And the Christ comes down to stay.
Not sure if FAYS are something you made up as a character but I looked them up and FAYS are Irish dancing shoes. If that was what you were going for I can see the faint metaphor between dancing shoes and toys.
I believe the proper word to use in UNTO instead of INTO. The purpose would be to show that it was because of him or for him. INTO using the context given makes it sound as though you are saying the bread was made into Jesus.
You use lots of capital letters where they are not grammatically needed. However, you do it fluently throughout so I assume it was done on purpose for affect. I do the same, even though I get hit or it all the time.
The overall poem is interesting though I do not completely understand it I can appreciate the flow, attention to detail, and the ability to keep a running story within the poem.
James McAlhany Jr.
The Chaotic Poet