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Review of Season Tickets  
Review by Melisscious
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is super fun! Thanks for doing this!
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Review of Fishin' & Stuff  
Review by Melisscious
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Nicely written! I appreciated the little nuances from the simple observations and sentences. You definitely have a way with words and characters!
I especially enjoyed how the story was interwoven with the church service. It ended so sadly but revealed itself so nicely.

I levelled up past religrift-on so I can definitely relate to those innocent questions and how it feels sitting in church. You really nailed the childlike wonder.

Happy scribing!


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Review of Threatening Waves  
Review by Melisscious
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I like your interesting start and your vivid descriptions made me feel like I had water in my nose! Short and salty!


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Review of Drive Thru Nerve  
Review by Melisscious
Rated: E | (3.5)
Great imagery. I could picture and feel what you said really clearly.
I also 'hate' when people honk because they're impatient. Take a chill pill. What are you rushing to? We're all gonna die one day, are they trying to get there faster?

I love the expression, "if you're running late you should have left earlier!"
It always springs to mind when I meet people in a rush.


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Review by Melisscious
Rated: E | (3.5)
Very nice. I really liked the rhythm and flow of this piece!
I guess, the melody got to me! *Laugh*


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Review of Low Pressure  
Review by Melisscious
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Oh my goodness! That was fun! I love dry humour. And you caught me off guard with this dialogue exchange. I thought Betty was just going to have a check-up, not end up Frankenstein's monster.

Her calmness is totally believable the way you wrote it. I've seen people (and myself) react in an eerily calm way amidst total chaos! Like the auto-pilot chemicals release and sedate the brain.

Careful with the knife Bett-gene!


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Review of The Dialogue 500  
Review by Melisscious
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Oooh Twiii-st! I love a twist at the end. This was an enjoyable read, funny and a relatable piece.
Should I be sort of concerned about that last bit? lol!

I also think friends should want you to be happy! Real or otherwise...
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Review by Melisscious
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Excellent post! I'm familiar with that joke and we've actually referenced it several times lately.

What I failed to realize is, we are next!
What if the bear is still hungry?

This is an excellent analogy for Canada!
There's much fewer people here, so it's much easier to simply accept that 'one group' in society is treated unfairly because they bring it on themselves.
Can't change the system right?

There's a surprising level of resentment toward the 'brother' eaten by the bear too. Because he might have driven out to the woods in a new truck from a house that was given to him? Or he might be allowed to shoot the bear without a tag? Or not paid tax on the gun he could have used to kill it if he was quicker?

This was really well thought out and written. I really enjoyed the comparisons. You very succinctly said something that is part of a difficult conversation.
I'm going to share this from your blog.
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Review of The Hermit's Tale  
Review by Melisscious
Rated: E | (4.0)
Haha. I feel this. I like how you used only a few words and yet I could see a trail of people snaking down a little goat trail on the side of a mountain. Various packages in hand. Some with small children at their sides. Here and there a dog.
His attempts to meditate on a mountain top remind me of someone trying to read in a bar. That is one of the ultimate ways to get people to talk to you! It's like the more you want to be left alone, the more most people have to ask 'what are you doing?' Or in this case, be apart of it.
Well done. Thanks for the chuckle at the end!
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Review by Melisscious
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Brrr! I actually felt the chill from the snow by the second line and the smell of salt air by the end. Very inspired imagery from interesting wordplay.
The beauty of this piece overshadowed the sad undercurrent that it gave me the impression of.
It definitely seems like one you have revisited often enough to draw out compelling descriptions and emotions from in such a succinct manner.
Thanks for the read!
Cheers!


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