This chapter is completely genius. The way you narrate the events as well as the dialogue spoken by the characters is excellent. The transition between events and points of view is very good too. I liked the chapter overall. The chapter relates very well to the story this far. Excellent job. Keep it up.
It's an amazing poem. It carries you with a good rhyme and words of movement. I like the connection between the first two stanzas and the last one. The first two are the intro to the third. Nicely done. May I suggest maybe you make it longer? It should be still better to see the words develop a little more. Keep writing!!!
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