|This was very well written! As a reader, I could actually feel the emotion. I don't want to nitpick, but there are a couple of things that would make this perfect overall.
I know daddy - Capitalize Daddy since used as a name
him since he didnt seem to be a danger - apostrophe in didn't
Leaving the doll she had worked so hard to benefit a complete stranger - add "for" after hard makes it easier to follow
Shannon say it - change say to saw
a rather remarkable little girl, make a rather remarkable gesture - change make to made
I thought this was a wonderful story, hope you find this review helpful.