This is awesome! I absolutely LOVE a good Mom Murder! Hahaha! Coming from a woman who doesn't like her's this story really hit me in the funny bone. I love you displayed the insanity of the woman through her stupid erotic novels. Makes her seem more evil than most know. In just a few short paragraphs you were able to show us a lifetime of what the main character has gone through. I'm glad that you found our current times a perfect time to lose it on the woman. I am for sure looking to read more! Introducing the uncle has really got me wondering what these two are eventually going to be up to. I hope this pans out as crazy as it sounds. Thank you for the comfort in bad mothers and writing. They can be true muses. Keep this up and I want to follow along and read more.
I LOVED this! You portrayed the character as such a strong individual but also made me think he might not know how amazing he is yet. I would love to see this flash piece go into a short story possibly! It truly expressed the youth of America today without screaming "help" ! I truly hope this main character continues to stick to his guns because that is a rare story these days. The structure, composition and grammar were all also very aesthetic as well. Thank you for sharing and I hope you keep plugging at it!
I like this poem. It's short yet filled with raw emotion and that is the ONLY poetry I will even read. Anyone can write a poem about anything but it takes a TRUE poet to submerse their feelings into rhyme and reason so effortlessly. I totally get where you are coming from as well. Isolation can bring out a lot. I am truly blessed that you shared this because I read a lot of people's stuff and so far nobody has triggered the emotion in me like you have. Thank you and I hope to read more soon. Please keep writing and never give up!
This is such a good piece and to those who have not lived that life the story could be such a surprise. A sad but very real and true to this planet surprise. I too grew up in a terrible neighborhood. Or ten. It's good to get this side out there because not enough people know the truth. It is so sad it took that boy going brain dead to change his ways but as a mother I bet his mom is glad she has her son back in a way. Even if it is this way. It's near impossible to leave that place or that life. So I commend you as a writer as well for writing this for us and yourself.
I absolutely loved this! I never get to read anything from a "bigger" perspective! The character Jason ended up being absolutely lovable as a character. When I first started reading I thought for sure Jason might be what society now calls a "fuxkboy" and he wasn't at all. He owned who he was as a whole and it was so refreshing because for once it was from a mans point of view. The author conveys a sadness still somehow but it's very bitter sweet. You have a knack for hiding true colors behind giggles. I do as well but cannot convey that to paper. I really enjoyed this so thank you for the contribution.