I have to say, I'm not usually a fan of math (I was an English Major and Math is like a foreign language to me), but I really liked this. And, I can relate to it as well. It seems our lives are surrounded by chaos and we allow it in under the guise of work. Great job!
Wow! That is beautiful. It makes me think of a love that has gone stale, like the way that marriages do sometimes. Perhaps the poet is going through depression and feels alone and isolated from her (his) mate. I liked it a lot and I really don't have any suggestions for improvement. Excellent piece.
What a sweet story! I love the connection and as the oldest of three children, I can certainly sympathize with the struggle to gain a parent's attention. It does always seem like we're trying to one-up each other, even as adults.
And the incident with the "cherry" was very nicely done. I can see the other three girls standing around, red-faced, trying to control their laughter behind their hands.
I agree 100%! I think the real flaws make the characters real, and if the characters aren't real, then what's the point of telling their story. Who cares about Mrs and Mr Perfect in their perfect little world with their perfect bodice ripping? I want someone who I can relate to in some way.
By the way, I love your writing style. I was laughing out loud through most of this and shouting "yeah that!" to the rest.
What a great short story! I want more. I want to know who the woman is in the rocking chair. What does she look like? How did she kill Oliver? I'm assuming Oliver is a ghost, right? I loved your characterization. I think there are so many questions here that you could really add to this story and it would enrich it so much more. Of course, as it is, it's a wonderful tale. I was hooked from the beginning.
As I said before, my only suggestion for improvement would be to add more. I'd love to know who the woman is and who Oliver really is.
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