I had a little time this evening so I thought I would take a look at your writings.
I found this very interesting. My husband is a Civil War buff and has mentioned the Hunley many times but I never really knew the story behind it other than it was a Confederate submarine.
Your story is well written and an easy and interesting read. You got my attention right away and held it throughout the story. You also provide great imagery through your descriptive wording and my mind's eye had no trouble picturing the scene. I didn't see any grammar or punctuation errors at all and I usually am sensitive to those right away. In my opinion this is a story well done.
It's nice to see this contest brought back each Spring. It feels like seeing the first robin that has returned after a long winter. The gift choices are very nice this year. I only wish I had more gps to bid with. The cause is worthy and boosts morale at the same time.
Please tell me you will finish this story. I can't wait to see where you are going with it and how your story is going to further evolve.
I think you caught my interest so well because I lost my mother and had years of conflicts with her and I also lost my grandmother who raised me as well as having lost my greatgrandmother who was very special to me.
Your story, even for a draft, is very well written and I only found one error where you left out a word in your 2nd sentence in the last paragraph. I think you meant to say "what that must be like". Keep on writing. I think you are very good.
An excellent article. Your reply to the writter is terrific. In my opinion, you need to make your list of all the free benefits and options part of the opening page a visitor encounters. It is all said in one very easy to read and understand article; all the benefits and everything you can do located in one place. It would only need a little change of tone here and there. I think it would more easily inform visitors and encourage more people to join us.
This is so honest and heart felt and if you ever lost someone you love, you easily identify with the wirter. I lost my dad many years agoe and never really got to know him and when I heard Reba's song it hit me the same way. My heart goes out to you and while the poem is emotional it is still very well written.
I really like this. It reminded me of a waitress we once knew. Special people like this come along rarely and so often are unappreciated. Your story is warming.
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