Wow, this painted quite of image in my mind. When you mentioned the newborn baby portion it made me wonder if you were talking about an actual newborn that was miscarried or a chance for someone to be born but was never given to chance to be conceived. It makes you think to take every opportunity in your life. A couple of grammatical things I wanted to point out, "some as fragile as a wrinkles of old woman." There you probably meant to say "some as fragile as wrinkles of an old woman." Another line where it says "some as small as newborn baby." You probably meant to say there "as small as a newborn baby." Overall great poem. Keep writing more!
I commend you for being so open about heartbreak and lost love. You gave good descriptions in your relating to us what you were feeling. The main critique I have is that the spelling was a bit off twice. I think you meant to say, "It went by too quick, I'm sorry." Also at the beginning I believe you meant to say "I fell too hard and I was expecting you to catch me..."
Also I think there could have been more flow but overall I felt it was good self-expression.
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