A great tale of revenge. I like how it was "fire" ants that got him in the end; very appropriate!
Near the end, the description of the little girl watching seemed a little off somehow. Maybe a little too much explaining. The ending leaves a little to be desired, particularly the last sentence.
Overall, though, I really liked it. 4 stars. :] Write on!
This story was really amazing! Great buildup, great ending. I was wondering the whole time just what James was capable of, and now I know. What a sad ending to a life. No edits that I could see. Write on!
I really loved this story. It was sweet, and it really brought back some memories from childhood: those summers you thought would never end, the friends you said you'd never forget... Really touching, especially with the undercurrent of her father's sickness. The only things I noticed were a few repetitive words [I kept noticing the word 'just'] and a couple of missed commas. Overall great job. Write on!
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