Thank you for starting this story, in my opinion it has potential! The plot, thus far, has not been exposed which is nice--i'll have to watch for more posts--and some good imagry.
The only things I see wrong thus far is the technical side. Everyone's style is different, so take it or leave it.
1) Use double spaces between your paragraphs. This makes it a little easier to read on a computer screen.
2) Careful with your spelling. You have a 'witch' where you obviously meant 'which'
Excellent! Keep up the good work, and post more :)