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Review by NCTentmaker
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Very cute story. I am new here and this is my first review so I am not sure what to write but your story was well written and entertaining, whimsical in a way, but upbeat and light. I enjoyed reading it. I have only one suggestion that comes to mind. Jason’s punch line at the end when he tells Casey to believe someone if they said there "could be tigers," you could rephrase the earlier section where he told Casey about his fears. Instead of simply agreeing with Casey when she said “there are no tigers running loose in the city,” Jason could have said, “there could be.” Anyway, that’s MHO for what its worth.
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