|It could use more details. Describe the room a little more, what the DB looks like.
And maybe when you hint the older vampires step outside, what's the scenery like? It was very generalized.
Sorry, I grew up in Alaska, I know the northern part of the state's more barren than further south. You'd have to have an air strip for the inn if you're closer to Barrow, Closer to Cold Foot they could drive.
But it's a good start so far for the story. I look forward to reading the rest and seeing how you edit this.