I like the thoughts. It speaks to the longing we all have in deep parts of our hearts. I personally like brevity. As a compulsive explainer, I understand the need to be understood. You might want to make your audience to reach a bit more. Just som thoughts - nice work.
Strong images - I could feel the emptiness and pain. It is always the remaining that know the full measure of morning. It is memory that is the surest promise of life after death. No matter what else, the departed person remains with us having changed us by the encounters with them. Nice
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