omg this is my favorite story yet!
stuff stephen king you are my new favorite author.
one day, with your permission im gunna either make that story into a short film or we can make it longer.
ok im gonna try my first proper review so bare with me...
when you said "Shaina would walk to the pill bottles and take one a out" you dont need the 'a'
"the best - and worst," could maybe be changed to "the best - and worst-"
somewhere in there at the start of a sentence you said WE. just change that e to lower case.
and "she went home and out moms said we could" pretty sure you meant to say "our moms"
so did i pass? i hope so. i seriously loved this story.
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