Very interesting to read- the poem is filled with imagery with Japanese connotations, and is beautifully constructed and what is especially good is the carefully chosen rhyme scheme which gives a strong structure and fits well.
A sense of despondency rings throughout the poem, leading to the statement about anonymity at the end. Highly interesting and well conceived!
Brilliant story, this is a well worded, well written piece which shows a high level of suspense within the dramatic action. Very interesting fast moving piece in which we follow the protagonist with interest. The detail in the descriptions shows a real level of insight into the likely movements and actions of the central character such as:'Fishing a toothbrush and paste out of the cabinet, he scrubbed the stench of beer and cigarettes from his teeth and tongue...' Well written... well done!
Really superb piece of writing, with highly appropriate use of language, this story carries the reader along into another world, which initially we are suspicious of by the main character is someone who we gain an interest in and sympathy for because of the clever way in which the story is put together. The success of the story lies in it being highly believable and something which could have a ring of truth within it - therefore the message rings out very succinctly from the start. We realise that the protagonist has flaws-' I guess I just want y'all to know that I ain't crazy. I did do some stuff I prob'ly shouldn't've, but I didn't hurt no one..'
On the other hand the story is told in such a human way that the reader can visualise the type of life that he has had,
and the sense to which his first name reflects the impersonal nature of the way that he is recognised, accentuated by his teacher's comments about him, show him to be a lone fighter within a world where the odds may have been stacked against him through birth. Well written and certainly deserving of a very positive reception from critics...
Very powerful letter with self revelatory aspects, touching on themes and ideas common to many writers while being very idiosyncratic and almost self challenging in some respects. Core values are discussed together with reflections on the passage of time and the impact of events and certain personal experiences on the writer of the letter, questioning whether this will be a testament in years to come to the things that the writer holds dear to them. Well written and with great use of inquisitory questions, this writer knows where their strengths and weaknesses lie and they are a good judge of their own abilities, as they put themselves under scrutiny in this letter form. A very highly commendable approach and so interesting to read. Well done!
Beautifully written poem, with nice use of imagery, written in a regular form with questions and answers. Shows the innocent curiousity of a vision of the angelic form through the device of using a magic mirror. A very spiritual uplifting poem- well done!
Superbly written poem- very short but really coming to the point in such a way as
to make the whole resonance of this aba rhyme scheme poem more reflective than dictating thought to the reader. A very nice, clear cut clever poem, which leaves the reader with a lot to think about. Well done!
A very well written montage of modern images, put together with a message about modern times and our reliance on IT. Well constructed stanzas which are filled with carefully chosen language, this is a clever poem which has a sense of humour behind it while sharply leading the reader to looking at what has become of the world today..... Well done!
Very interesting style of writing, highly unusual with commentary from observers
put in the piece in the way that literary critics are cited- it works really well and
this is a very novel way of writing, which opens up new possibilities for the written form. Easily understandable and cogent, this is a very well written piece...
Nicely written in a clear form using rhyming couplets which work well to
juxtapose with the more complex questions asked within the poem itself.
Resonant and very accessible, this poem is one which draws the reader in, its'
regular stanzas offering a good supportive structure for the subject matter.
A real study of a spider and its web, with lots of interesting imagery and bring up thoughts of what sort of dominion spiders have in their world. Good use of language and a well balanced poem, this shows a sense of entrapment. This stanza is especially good:
'In his lone
high wire act his desperate
Leap of faith
Into the soft empty
Nicely written, this poem through repetition of what 'love is not', through use of the poetic device of negative capability, shows what love is. It shows the different scenarios where love can be one thing or another and through simple yet effective use of language, love is contrasted, within all of its permutations, with references to Shakespeare incorporated into this exporatory poem. It shows the real sense of what love means, and what it is proverbially taken to mean. Something that Shakespeare himself also explores so the reference works well. A poem well worth reading. Well done!
A poem reflecting the pain and loss of faith in the feeling of trust caused by the actions of someone who sounds as though they were not worth so much attention. A heartfelt outpouring of emotions, and good use of language - skillfully written, and something which anyone who has had a broken heart can relate to. Well done.
A fascinating story- the power of the myserious coin is something which the reader finds compelling. Questions about what this is and what it can do are raised almost immediately. The language used is highly appropriate to take us through a series of events which we feel is almost like riding on a magic carpet- where will it lead us to next?? If this is just the start of the novel, what comes next is something worth finding out about... Well done......!
Very moving piece of writing, so very sad and yet at the same time compelling to read. Learning about why Melody was different was written about in a very sensitive and educational manner, leaving all who read this no doubt with a sense of profound wonder that Melody could be so afflicted but at the same time that her life was so important to all how knew her. An inspiring story which is well written and well communicated.....
Well written - some nice touches with word play and use of alliteration etc. - an interesting quite unique theme to write about and the characterisation is good also. It leaves the reader wondering wha will happen next and what sort of adventures will follow..... Really very readable........
Really well written and highly descriptive piece, filled with interesting information about the event described and giving background also. Filled with images which all evoke traditions of a past age, we feel immediately connected to these rituals and begin to understand how this celebration could be important to those involved. A very uplifing piece of writing and really word perfect ...Well done.....!
Nicely written piece showing the juxtaposition of expectations of life in America and what it actually means living there. You capture well the sense of hope and optimism and the glossy image of America in the initial paragraphs and then the essay gradually opens eyes to the reality. The human heart is at the centre of the story and your exposition about this is very authentic and offers a real
sense of context for those who wish to know about the real America. Well done...!
An interesting story, which seems very realistic and something which the reader gets drawn into. If perhaps more action could be introduced as a sub plot in the earlier stages it may evolve more quickly, but if this does not seem right, then it is really not necessary. It sounds as though it is something that must have taken quite some time to think up and write and is extremely on the pulse with many references to Facebook, Twitter etc. which would appeal to the reader of today and sounds trendy. Well done!
Really interesting topic- the frustration and the feelings of hunger come forward and the whole mood of the piece is very influenced by basic olfactory feelings.
Good use of imagery and this is a sequence of events that is very vividly portrayed and easy to relate to. There are some nice touches such as
the last line of the final stanza 'dishes can wait'.... A well executed piece of writing.....
Really interesting piece of writing. The way that the main character is named after the Nintendo character
really works and the great juxtaposition of every day things such as putting on weight if Sonic is not healthy
with his sense of action and being enthusiastic about he is doing is really poignant. The shift of emphasis in the second
part and the change of tempo are very interesting and ultimately the character seems very robust and gains strength throughout
due to his heroic status, which seems compelling. This writing animates and leaves the reader with a sense of wanting to read more and really enthralls and captures the spirite of Sonic, leaving the reader wanting more- moving from stage to stage of the action makes things really fast moving and ulitamately there is hope that Sonic will triumph over his predicament and win the day. Will he go to the doctor again to ask more about weight gain the the future or will he not be able to due to too much gameplaying or a lack
of interest in losing weight? How will the other characters develop? This is a funny and really well written story from someone who clearly has a sense of humour but knows exactly how to develop characters. Really well worth reading and it could appeal to older children and adults alike who have played with Nintendo and those that have not also- it probably has universal appeal.
Well done- this is the sort of story that is very new in terms of ideas and could not be boring.
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