This was a good short piece that highlighted the emotional separation between youth and adulthood. I enjoyed the description of Annie's eyes and the sense of helplessness emanating from her grandmother. In the end, the reader is left with questions about who, and what, this Tandy really is. Well done.
Pros - Good description of Annie's eyes, the uncertainty of the grandmother, and the mystery of Tandy.
Cons - Not much, some revision of the mentioning of the cellar in the second paragraph might be considered, but that's about it.
Overall, a nice read that left me wondering what might live in my basement yet again.
Sorry it took so long to get back. I haven't really read much about these boxes, but I imagine there are any number of scenarios you could work from. For me, every story depends on the theme I'm working from and that great immortal question 'What if...?' What if the box contained the vengeful ghost of an ex-Nazi that was imprisoned inside during WWII? Even Hitler maybe, trying to possess the boy to bring back the Third Reich? What if every time he opened the box he had a precognitive vision? First, it would simply help him to cheat on a test, taking bigger steps each time in order to manipulate and control his actions, leading to him ending up in the box himself maybe? Have fun and let me know how it goes, just don't drink the wine.
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