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Review of How I Came Out  
Review by Josh
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This story is quite inspiring. I've had some trouble with people when I came out almost a full year ago, but everything's coming together now.

Mostly everyone thinks I'm cool and always asks me the most accurate question ever now: "Have you got a boyfriend yet?"

I think this story is just great. It lifted me up when I read it. I am truly blessed to read such work.
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Review by Josh
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Right on! I agree with you on almost all of this.

Yes, it should be called marraige.

Also, God created us to live on Earth and then somehow--through Adam and Eve, we got a sinful nature from birth. We all sin, so God forgives us anyways if we are saved, etc. I am sort of a radical Christian AND liberal. Such a weird combination, I know. But, yeah, why would God send us to hell for something we can't control?

Hmm. That's about it. Everything else is right on target.
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Review of Someday  
Review by Josh
Rated: 13+ | (2.0)
Hmm. This story is great. Perhaps I could see more into the rest of this story in the future?

It was a little short, but overall, a nice basis for the start of a book or a novella.

Only thing that brought down the score was the grammatical and punctuational errors. That's the only thing that needs work. Other than that, it's fine!
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Review by Josh
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
This poem is pretty much the way I myself feel sometimes. Although my own psyche isn't affected by the buzz of everyone as much as it was over 20 weeks ago.
  
I understand what you went through. It was hell for me the first few weeks, but you'll adjust to everything sooner or later. Don't worry! Worrying only causes more doubt!
  
This poem was an excellent topic as a freeform, but still felt like there was something missing. You need to work just a tad on the flow. I thought it was good, but maybe you should shoot for less lines and more syllables? Just a thought...
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Review of Pride  
Review by Josh
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This considerably lengthy story has helped me considerably and has bolstered my own self-confidence of my "gayness". I am definitely proud to be gay, but not so at school right now. I wish I could be more like Justin at times, but sadly I am like Randy. But that's all about to change!

This story from your life has great meaning to it and it was splendidly descriptive and detailed. I love the emotional aspects of it, mostly because it reflects how deep-seated my own personality runs and how fearful I am to tell my own parents, for they are homophobic and I would best not tell them now, but wait until the time is right.

I cried, along with you and your mother when she found the matchbook, but I also smiled when Justin beamed at the end. This was very descriptive. It really tugged at my heartstrings.
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