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Review by Mary T (Ravalyn)
Rated: E | (3.0)
I found this to be a profound poetic reflection of your personal woe. Speaking of "your" that is the possessive form and you used it where I believe you meant to use the contraction "you're" for you are.
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Review by Mary T (Ravalyn)
Rated: E | (3.5)
Sara, the 90's and early part of this century did have better music. This was mostly because the singers, song composers, and musicians shared your angst.

I am not sure if you were trying to make an ironic statement about modern, uneducated spelling/grammar by purposely making grammatical errors, but, if so, kudos!

The education deficit of today was well claimed and demonstrated in a deliberate poetic representation (i.e., via the omission of necessary commas and possessive apostrophes as well as the failure to spell out 'okay' in favor of the abbreviation OK). If this was purposely done, then I further applaud you the ironic accusation of narcissism. How poignant to lecture from a proverbial soapbox about the narcissism of others while subtly postulating as though you are better than everyone else or at least aim for better.

I am duly impressed (very Jonathan Swift of you). On the off-chance that this was not orchestrated purposely, I would have to then advise refreshing your grammar and syntax proficiency.

Nevertheless, even if this was accidentally accomplished in a frustrated rant, there have been many acclaimed pieces of art and especially science gained initially or in part by accident.
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