|Very interesting story! I love the flow of the piece, and how real the characters are. While I might not have a clear perspective on the physical appearances of all the characters, each character's personality shines strongly through their words and actions.
I would suggest more action scenes to change the pace at crucial moments. Let Joan be hyper-focused on her upcoming date as she doesn't yet know Mokuba. You already show a bit of that tension melt away as they begin their date (and I love how she handles his concerns), and this, I think, would be highlighted more if the tension was made more palpable in the beginning.