| Well, I really like it until the last phase. I'm not sure if it a lack of meaning to me or the way it flows. I have read it 3x and not quit put my finger on what it is.
It all seems to flow so smoothly and easily developing a picture for me and than the last phase just hit me like the gravel edge of a freshly paved road.
Sorry, I know that doesn't really offer much help. Like I said I read it, re-read it stepped back and read it again; no insight to why it hits me that way but the best I was able to narrow it to was the last 3 lines.