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99 Public Reviews Given
99 Total Reviews Given
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I'm a tough grader, but I don't neglect good things when I see them. I'll be considering two things when I review your piece. 1) Form. How is the pacing? Are you going for a conventional story structure, and if so, is that structure in place? Did the story resolve itself in a satisfying way, or is it an anticlimax? I generally don't go into spelling/grammar unless it's a major issue. 2) Content. This is where it gets tricky and subjective. Sometimes I'll give an objectively bad piece a good rating because it captured the spirit of something I'm interested in – or maybe it grabbed me in another way. If your story is beautifully written but low-stakes, trivial, or out of touch (I'm one of those jazz cigarette-crazed millennials you've heard so much about) the best you're getting is a 4.0.
I'm good at...
I'm a history nerd, so I'm good at noticing details in period pieces. "They wouldn't have used that word in 1757," etc. I'm also a filmmaker, so I'm good at thinking visually.
Favorite Genres
Historical fiction, sci-fi, horror, fantasy, adventure
Public Reviews
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Review by Leif the Lucky
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This is a hoot! even so, at times it gets a little too ridiculous for any real comedic effect. I could hear the Duke's voice though, clear as "that'll be the day"
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Review by Leif the Lucky
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
I enjoyed.
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Review by Leif the Lucky
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
ha! welcome to my childhood...

A clever and very engaging story. I must admit I was tempted to look at the end... but didn't.

Every one of the 500 words was rich.

Just one criticism... Hollingsworth...? Very aristocratic and Anglo-Saxon... and cliché.

Thanks for a great read :)
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Review by Leif the Lucky
Rated: E | (4.0)
You need to break up with your boyfriend, sweetie :P

Thank you, and keep writing.
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Review of The Dream  
Review by Leif the Lucky
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Creepy. As. F*ck. Great work; I wasn't quite sure what the whole goings-on of the conspiracy was though. But I looooved the dream sequences.
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Review by Leif the Lucky
Rated: E | (3.0)
oh man, that's a big question.... well i wouldn't want to stand out. i'd dirty myself and steal someone's clothes. then i'd try to find a way back. if there was no way back... hmm... i'd probably just try to blend in. i can ride a horse and use a sword... but i can't speak their languages... though since most were so uneducated i'd likely tell some cock-and-bull story about how i'm from a faraway land. if it were certain i'd never come home i'd probably take up a trade and start a family. maybe if i was dropped into scandanavia i'd go raiding and be a viking. i'd definitely like that.
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Review by Leif the Lucky
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Great! I really enjoyed the Hansel and Gretel parallels. One piece of (hopefully constructive) criticism I have is the dialogue. Somehow I didn't quite believe that in that time period of uncertainty and violence, the interactions between the children of the lord would be so peaches and cream. The alien woman really intrigued me! I do wish we could have seen more of her and the high stakes of the danger the children were in.

Overall though, I thought it was awesome. I'll be checking out some of your other work ;)
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